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So i am currently working on a short story, and while i have writers block at the moment i wished to take the time to attempt to gather opinions from anyone who wishes to read the current state of the story in whole. Even while i do not have writers block anyone willing to read it and post their thoughts about it would be appreciated as well. The only thing that i ask is to not criticize an unfinished chapter. I will place a hyphen below the chapter's final line if it is finished. Lastly remember that this is a work in progress so it will not be perfect and because of that there will be typos, grammatical errors, some slight/major confusion(depends on what the confusion is on, whether a sentence or a part of the story), etc.
The link to the short story: https://goo.gl/UNM0sp
PS: If you just want to place a vote then you can, but if you want to provide extra feedback or anything like that then you may do that as well. However, if you place a vote that is 3 or below i would like you to provide feedback on why you feel that way so that maybe i can improve my story.

Oh and if you do choose 4 or 5 (thank you) you can provide feedback about what i could do better, or what you would like to be seen done, or your favourite part (put in spoiler tag for the sake of others i suppose). Anything and everything will help

Oh oh how about the only thing to comfort the main character is like an object and she loses it and goes on a deep dark trip in her soul turning her into a "monster"

That is actually a very interesting idea that i will remember to incorporate at some point.. in-fact.... now that i think about it im pretty sure that i already have an idea of how i could do that. Thanks lynn

Brilliant text, good job.